#1 7. Dezember 2008 Hallo erstmal, Ich bitte euch darum diesen englischen Text nach Rechtschreibfehlern, Fehler in der Zeit ( Tense), Kommafehler und Satzstellung (Word order) zu kontollieren. Die Zeit, die wir verwenden müssen ist simple present. Danke im Vorraus. --------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- In Chapter 5 Ponyboy wakes up in the church and finds a letter from Johnny that says he went to get supplies. Johnny buys a copy of the book “Gone with the wind.” Furthermore, Johnny insists, that they have to cut their hair, because they want to be unrealised. First Ponyboy delays but later he understands, that he must do it and cuts his hair. For the next week, the boys hide out at the church and pass there time with reading “Gone of the Wind”, and playing poker. Later Ponyboy recites a poem titled “Nothing Gold can stay.” After a few days Dally comes to the church and gives Ponyboy a letter from Sodapop. After he reads the letter, Dally goes with Johnny and Ponyboy to a restaurant. There he gives them a very important information. He says that the friends of Bob are angry about Bob’s death. Because of this there is going to be a fight between Socs and Greasers. Furthermore Darry tells Ponyboy and Johnny, that they have a spy. The spy is the redhead Cherry, who Ponyboy and Johnny meet at the cinema. + Multi-Zitat Zitieren
#2 7. Dezember 2008 AW: Englisch Es sind zwar keine offiziellen fehler, aer dieses ständige wiederholen von "tell" und "say" ist stilistisch nicht sehr anspruchsvoll.. nur so als tip + Multi-Zitat Zitieren
#3 7. Dezember 2008 AW: Englisch Das with würd ich weglassen... Ist stilistisch besser ... + Multi-Zitat Zitieren
#5 8. Dezember 2008 AW: Englisch so hätte ichs bissel ausgebessert. ganz wichtig: kein komma vor that! + Multi-Zitat Zitieren