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Jepho · 29. Mai 2009

Das ist unser Show die wir präsentieren soll ,ist soweit alles in Ordnung?
Könnt ihr das Deutsche übersetzen ich hab da Probleme

M) Welcome Ladies and Gentleman. We know that violent is no solution , but there are always people who take this way. Michael always search trouble and he often wants to beat someone up. In the disco he always provok other guys. Welcome Michael.

M) Hello Michael

Mi) Hello

M) Michael in which situations it happend that you beat someone up?

Mi) When someone offend my family or when someone talk behind my back.

M) And are they talking lot about you?

Mi) Thats not important. When they want to say something the should come and say it to my face.

M) And how it continues. How can I imaigne it?

Mi) Then I talk with them about the situation and when they get cheeky. I will beat them up.

M) What would cheeky he?

Mi) When they say shut up and go away thats not your problem.

M) What are you doing in this situation? Do you beat someoneup immadentely?

Mi) First I will tackle him and when he defend hisself I will beat him up.

M) It happens regualary?

Mi) Yes, it happens after

M) And , do you had problems with the police?

Mi) Yes , quite often

M) And what did they do?

Mi) I´ve got many reports from the police.

M) Why do you get the reports?

Mi) Wegen Körperverletzung

M) When you have begun to beat someone?

Mi) I´ve began to beat someone with 13.

M) How does it came from?

Mi) In the past I was always the victim and always beaten up by someone. then my mother always said I must defense myself. then it was my turn to beat someone.

M) Now we want to welcome another quest. His name is Matin . He is 16 years old and if he likes to beat someone up he would tell us now. Welcome Matin.

M) Hello Matin, how do you like his oet?

Ma) At first I want to ask him : Are you proud of that what you do?

Mi) For sure

Ma) Beat someone on the road this is what you find cool?

Mi) Be careful of that what you saying.

M)Do you think I´m scared from you?

M) What would you do when you get provocated by someone?

Ma) I want beat him up immadentely . At first I will ask him why he or she provocate me and talk to him-

Mi) but in some situations you can´t talk with the people. They diliberately try to provoke you.

Ma) Dont you find yourself assozial. Just because someone looks at you you dont have the right to lash him.

Mi) I know that my behavior is not correct but there is a border.

Ma) There is no border as I see you always look for trouble.

M) Have you ever been a victim of violence?

Ma) no not really . I always clear i t with talking. But I have seen many people who was victims of violence.

M) Now we want to invite a special quest . His name is Waquas. He is 18 years old but he was often a victim of violence . Welcome Waquas.

W) Hello Hamad.

M) Hello Waquas. We already heard that you was a victim of violence . Please describe me your situation.

W) Previously in the school when I was 14 , I was alway beaten by the other guys. They have beats me as a punching log.

Ma) Dont have told it your parents or your teachers?

W) I was afraid to tell it . The guy said if I blow something out they will smash me even harder.

M) Have you ever thought about suicide?

W) Therea was a time where I only wanted to be left restless.

Ma) there you can see what guys like you break to others. This boy wanted to kill himself.

Mi) Yes, but it´s not my problem.

Ma) Waquas is it still so that you are the victim?

Wa ) No it has improved. Since I was in the selfdefence club , no one trys to lead me more.

Ma) Where the people who have beaten you like Michael?

W) No they wasn´t like Michael. Michael beat someone whey he get provokated. but the guys in the scholl have beaten me without any reason.

M) Can you five a few tps for people who have still problems with violence?

W) I want to say don´t he scared of anybody. You should always talk anout your problems with your parents or with some teachers. In schools you can search for a trust teacher. He will help you with your problems.

Auch wenn meine Aufgabe ist , möglich neutral die Sendung zu modiereren, muss ich mich von einer Sache ganz klar distanzieren , das ist die Gewalt , da sist etwas was nicht funktoniert wo mann sagen kann einer macht es richtig und einer falsch , ich spreche nicht von der Gewalt wenn ich ich angegriffen werden , da hat jeder Mensch ein Recht sich zu wehren ganz klar aber ich hoffe das ihr an einem Punkt gekommen seit und es lernt, dass er nicht so schmerzhaft ist wie bei Waquas. Ich wünsche euch alles gute für euer leben und hiermit verabschiede ich mich , wir sehen uns dann das nächste mal bei the Problems TodaY!

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enteka · 29. Mai 2009

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Eieiei, sorry, aber das ist granatenmäßig schlechtes Englisch..
Um auf deine Frage zu kommen, ob soweit alles in Ordnung sei:
1. "he, she, it - das s muss mit!" -> s an die Verben in 3. Person Singular
2. Zeitenfolge und Hilfsverben, bei "do you had" rollen einem die Zehnägel weg. Entweder did you have (mit to do als Hilfsverb) oder have you had (mit to have als Hilfsverb)
3. Der Aufbau eines stinknormalen englischen Satzes Subjekt, Verb, Objekt. Nicht das Objekt vor das Verb ziehen.
4. In Fragen auch Fragewörter benutzen. Außerdem werden 90% aller Fragen mit "to do" gebildet, "And how it continues." wird zu "And how does it continue / go on?".
5. Würde ich dir generell raten, die Konjugation von Verben nochmal zu wiederholen.

do.ob · 29. Mai 2009

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bin der gleichen meinung, das ist richtig schlechtes english, dein ausdruck ist teils vollkommen falsch,so drückt man sich im englishen einfach nicht aus...
außerdem haste zu oft z.b. die wörter beat sb. up benutzt...
damit ist es noch nicht genug
oft haste auch falsche zeitformen angewendet: i will tackle him
da schreibt man i would tackle him...
würde ich eigentlich nochmal komplett überarbeiten die präsentation meiner meinung nach, also wenn dabei was gutes rauskommen soll...

Jepho · 29. Mai 2009

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neu machen??

Das dauert zu lange , könnt ihr meinen Text halbwegs verbessern ;(

enteka · 29. Mai 2009

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Deine Hausaufgaben musst du schon selber machen. Du hast ein paar Tips bekommen, die du auch anwenden sollst. Bei diesem Fehlergrad wäre ein "überarbeiten" gleich einem "neu verfassen", dafür ist das Board nicht gedacht.

Jepho · 29. Mai 2009

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ok cih schreib alles neu und poste es hier ok : D??

Jepho · 3. Juni 2009

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M) Welcome Ladies and Gentleman. We know that violence is no
solution, but there are always
people who takes this way. Michael always
searches trouble and he often
wants to beat someone up. In the disco he always provokes other
guys. Welcome Michael.

M) Hello Michael

Mi) Hello

M) Michael in which situations does it happen that you beat someone
up?

Mi) When someone offends my family or when someone talk behind
my back.

M) And are they talking a lot about you?

Mi) That´s not important. When they want to say something they
should come and say it into my
face.

M) And how does it go on? How can I imagine that?

Mi) Then I talk with them about the situation and when they get
cheeky, I will beat them up.

M) What is cheeky for you?

Mi) For example, when they say shut up or something else.

M) What are you doing in this situation? Do you beat someone up
immediately?

Mi) First I will Tackle him and when he defends himself I will beat him
up.

M) Does it happen often?

Mi) Yes, it happens often!

M) And did you have problems with the police?

Mi) Yes, quite often!

M) And what did they do with you?

Mi) They´ ve sent me many reports, you know.

M) Why did you get the reports?

Mi) Because I hurt someone badly.

M) When did you begun to beat someone up?

Mi) I´ ve began to beat someone up at the age of 13.

M) Why did you become so aggressive?

Mi) In the past I have always been victim, then my mother always
said: I must defend myself. Then it was my turn to beat someone
up.

M) Now we want to say hello to another guest. His name is Matin. He
is 16 years old and he will tell us now if he likes to beat
someone up.

Welcome Matin.

M) Hello Matin, how do you like his act?

Ma) At first I want to ask him: Are you proud of that what you do?

Mi) For sure

Ma) Beat someone up on the road this is what you find cool?

Mi) be careful of that what you say!

Ma) Do you think, I´m scared of you?

M) What would you do when you get provoked by someone?

Ma) I wont beat him up immedintely. At first I will ask him why he or she provocates me and talk to him!

Mi) But in some situations you can`t talk with the people. They deliberately try to provoke you.

Ma) Don´t you find yourself antisocial. Just because someone looks at you, you don´t have the right to bash him up.

Mi) I know that my behaviour is not correct but there is a limit.

Ma) There is no limit as I see you always look for trouble.

M) Have you ever been a victim of violence?

Ma) No not really. I always clear it with talking. But I have seen many people who were victims of violence.

M) Now we to invite a special guest. His name is Waquas. He is 18 years old but he has often been a victim of violence. Welcome Waquas.

W) Hello

M) Hello Waquas. We` ve already heard that you´ ve been a victim of violence. Please describe me your situation.

W) Previously at school when I was 14, I was always beaten by the other guys. They took me as a punching bag.

Ma) You didn´t have it tell it your parents or your teachers?

W) I was afraid to tell it. The guys said if I blew something out they would beat me even harder.

M) Have you ever thought about suicide?

W) There was a time where I only wanted to be left alone and find peace.

Ma) There you can see what guys like you do to others. This boy wanted to kill himself.

Mi) Yes, but it´s not my problem.

Ma) Waquas is it still so that you are the victim?

W) No it has improved. Since I was in the self defence club, no one tries to beat me any more.

Ma) Where the people who have beaten you like Michael?

W) No they weren´t like Michael. Michael beat someone when he feels provoked. But the guys at school beat me without any reason.

M) Can you give a few tips for people who have still problems with violence?

W) I want to say don´t be scared of anybody. You should always talk about your problems with your parents or with some teachers. Ai school you should go to the head teacher or to a teacher who you like and trust in. He will help you with your problems.

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Und wie hab ich das gemacht

Chickenjoe · 3. Juni 2009

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Welche Klasse gehst du denn? Also als erstes würde ich so Mörderfehler wie "he she it, das s muss mit" vermeiden und Fehler bei unregelmäßig deklinierten Verben vermeiden, dann hört sichs schon gar nich mehr sooo deutsch-englisch an....

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